Thanks for visiting my blog! This essay is an argumentative one, as I planned it to be.
As you might have been able to notice, it is about children watching television. For the time being, not everyone in this class managed to write this, and it's not perfect. Though, I think it was a good experience for everyone, and the content is pretty good- good arguments and understanding of the motion. As I mentioned previously, it's not perfect, there are some things I would like to improve on. The most important thing, in my opinion, is creativity- or at least, in this kind of writing. I guess there aren't many ways to use your imagination when writing an argumentative essay, but I'm sure we can improve on it. What this essay lack are examples and personal experiences. Unless it's not a serious topic, I think examples could help with making the essay more interesting.And I think we could have used better words to explain the idea in paragragh 5. But this was the first time- we will improve gradually. Overall, it was fun. :)
-there was one point I wanted to make in this essay, but I guess no-one understood it: numbness towards violence
If it can be said that " TV is beneficial for children," I disagree with this statement. Of course, TV might have some benefits, like educational programs or creating laughter. However, I disagree that TV is beneficial for students because it can cause numbness toward violence, it can make kids aggressive and TV can make children become addicted to it.
First, TV can cause violent and aggressive characteristics. There are many ways children can confront violence in TV such as dramas or programs that contain violence. By watching people punch or shoot others,children may think that it's cool. So they would probably imitate the violent scenes. If they keep doing that, their characteristics would also turn aggressive. Having an aggressive personalities might be a serious problem when they are grown up. They might not be adjusted to the society and may commit some serious crimes.
Second, TV reduced the time we can spend with our family members. People who argue that TV is beneficial for children say there are some programs that we can share with our family members. However, there are rare. Most TV programs show signs of violence and these are usually not beneficial for most people.
Additionally, TV tends to deteriorate the amount of time into thinking, When watching TV, you just plainly look at the box and just stare at it for hours; no wonder it's called the 'dumb box.' Humans, especially growing students, should gave many chances to use their creativity and brains. Unfortunately, nowadays many of us stare blankly at the television without putting any effort in thinking. This is a grave problem, because it also indicates that we will lose many humane resources. To stop that, we should turn off our televisions this instant and start using our brains!
Furthermore, the behavior that you act when you watch TV is not helpful. Kids always have a snack or a drink in their hands. Even if it is a big amount of crackers, you eat it all without noticing.Many people became fat because of this kind of behavior. Also, many people scream when someone is bothering them while watching TV. This is not a positive aspect of watching televisions.
Therefore, television should be banned for every children until the age of fifteen, as it can make children aggressive and reduce the time we can spend with our families, and detoriate the amount of time. Ad this would give us a better world with children who are not addicted to television.
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